castirongoldfish

4/1/2008, Sean

So...I know you are Mrs. Comics herself, so here's my pitch.

The character I want to use for this is Nomad. I've attached as much
of his history as I could find, but don't look there...not yet, and
necessarily not at all.

Up front what I am looking for, as I've explained, is a rejection
letter from marvel. Anything else is gravy.

So what does it take (other than my plethora of anyways and so...s) to
make this to standard. My request from you is to help me stay on
target on this. This I find interesting, but I find, being more a
presentaiton of the visual I am trying to present in only words,
exceedingly challenging to ensure the bases....

What is this tale? Up front it's called Citizen Zero. It's not
Nomad, exactly, I'll explain...give me just a second. While I take
the second....http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Nomad_(comics)

Anyway...(there it is)...Nomad is theoretically dead, but, like all
good superheroes he was frozen at one point. So Strucker got his
hands on Nomad's DNA. He also controled Peter Gyrich (who showed up
in Xmen Movie [#1]). So you have Gyrich and heroes genes, but it's
infected with Super Soldier Serum (SSS)....a superhero chemical that
periodically drives its user mad or breaks down genes. But what if we
could grow someone up from day one with SSS in the genes, someone who
the serum wouldn't be an intrusion.

1. Who do you go to? The Trypytch. There was a villain long ago
called Gargoyle (The Incredible Hulk's first villain). He had a kid,
supergenius of the evil kind, named Gremlin who build power armors.
He eventually was killed in battle. Interestingly he had a pet
genetically engineered dino named Droog who was intelligent. So,
let's think a minute. Before you go off to pick a fight with Iron
Man, if you have genetic building capibilities, what do you do? You
clone 3 of yourselves and tell them to reak vengence should you fall.
What do they do, intellectually developed but emotionally nothing?
Basically, nothing, or, better yet, look for a job. So one Mr. Gyrich
hires them.

2. Who do you clone? Well, no kidding, Nomad, who is going to be
used in other marvel plots (see the wiki entry for Bucky). The other
one is going to be one Mrs. Valerie Cregrin, derived from Frau
Kreigerin. Maybe one more...Masterman? Someone Else?

3. Gyrich is gone and Strucker/Hydra has always had cash flow
problems. So the Trypych is trying to manage their budget. Things
are falling apart at ther small, north dakota village where everyone
works. All the Trypych has is an enforcer and a few orderlies, and
every time they use the enforcer (maybe Tombstone), it costs them.

4. Like Nomad, without stabilizing element, C0 will die in five
years. So will Cregrin.

All hell now breaks loose. Things get bad when main character stops a
low grade superhero (prob the constrictor or electro) tries to knock
over the diner to impress the girls he is with.

That's what I have so far. it's a story, and not yet a good one.